Post by David Lane on Mar 9, 2010 11:34:33 GMT -5
"big Brother is often a difficult game to play inn. It's is important too allways have you're eyes on the prize and nevar loose focuss on teh task ahead with so many houseguests competititions, alliences going on you could get caught up and end up evicted be fore you no it. How ever their are many diferent strageties one can use when playing the game. You can try to win every thing you can or you can through every challenge that comes your way. You never know who can or we'll win so dont ever give up and never go down without a fight."
1. "Big Brother is often a difficult game to play.
I capitalized the B in Big, and omitted the misspelled word "in"
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2. It is important to always have your eyes on the prize and never lose focus on the task ahead.
I took out the "'s" and correctly spelled always. You're should be your, nevar should be spelled never. Loose should be lose and focuss focus. teh is the. I added a period after ahead because the sentence seems to be a run-on.8
2a. With so many house guests, competitions, and alliances going on you could end up evicted before you no it.
Capitalize With, house guests is two words, add a comma, spell competitions right as well as alliances, an and should come before alliances. Omit "get caught up and". No space in be fore. No is know.9
3. However there are many different strategies one can use when playing the game.
However is one word. Their is there. Different and strategies are spelled wrong.4
4. You can try to win everything you can, or you can throw every challenge that comes your way.
Everything is one word. Add a comma after the 2nd can. through is "throw"3
5. You never know who can or will win so don't give up and never go down without a fight."
We'll is will. don't. omit ever.3
Finalized draft...
"Big Brother is often a difficult game to play. It is important to always have your eyes on the prize and never lose focus on the task ahead. With so many house guests, competitions, and alliances going on you could end up evicted before you know it. However there are many different strategies one can use when playing the game. You can try to win everything you can, or you can throw every challenge that comes your way. You never know who can or will win so don't give up and never go down without a fight."
